Film Opening Final Cut

Responding to my audience feedback - here is my final cut, including the improvements people suggested.

Audience Feedback

Expert feedback / Family & friends feedback

What was good/effective about the project?

·      Continuity

·      Different shots back and forth to the character playing guitar

·      How the character is presented

·      ‘Fusion Films’ title looked good

·      Good narration

·      Close-ups of the character playing guitar – reminds you of what the film is about

·      Tracking shot of the wall filled with different posters – sets up storyline

·      Voice-over – explains that his dad died and shows that it has made an impact/went well with the music

·      Great cutting to the music, to the beat etc

·      Interesting variety of shots

·      Different camera angles

·      Music timing

What did you like?

·      Production companies

·      Several different camera shots

·      The camera shots

·      Good use of mise-en-scene

·      How the titles were written down on paper

·      Written titles

·      How the titles parallel edited with the other shots

·      Tracking shot of the posters on the wall – shows his role models

·      Character clearly established – we know who he is and what he wants

·      Overall theme

·      Hand written titling

Any suggestions for improvements?

·      Include music during production companies

·      Include credits?

·      Include the title of the film

·      Day/night transition – where is he going?

·      The pencil slamming down was a little distracting – not sure if necessary

What type of genre is it? How can you tell?

·      Drama/musical – voiceover (events have happened)/guitar (rock music)

·      Drama – domestic set up/motivation of father dying

·      Drama with music

·      Music-Drama

·      Teen movie? – Due to the age of the character and the rock/guitar theme

Is there a protagonist? What are they like? How can you tell? Is there equilibrium? Is there an agent of change? Do we see disequilibrium? Does it set up the theme, tone, storyworld, plot etc?

·      Clear protagonist  (Danny) – voice-over - been through a lot/music helps him escape

·      Clear equilibrium

·      Unclear disequilibrium

·      Disequilibrium hinted at – protagonist leaving house

·      Storyworld – music theme

·      Plot is set up well

·      Plot – character wants to go to University

·      Clear main character – determined and aspirational, maybe frustrated – due to facial expressions, body language and the sigh at the end.

 

A rough cut of my film opening.

(not finished)